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some people prefer live in a house but others think live in a flat advantages. What do you think advantages or disadvantages. Compare them

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Nowadasy
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Nowadays
 some
people
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 prefer to live in a
house
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 but others think that there
is
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are
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 more advantages to living in an apartment I think , living in a
house
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 is considered better than living flat. I think
,
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 it is considered
abvantages
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an advantage
 for
people
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wgo
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who
 live in
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house
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the house
a house
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. Some
people
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 think
live
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living
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 in a
house
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 better than
live
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living
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 in
an
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a
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 flat.
this
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 is a
reazon
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reason
,
people
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 will have
chance
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a chance
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 which
live
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lives
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house
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,
such
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 as
,
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people
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 who live in a
house
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 never get bored because they may work
outsite
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outside
 or train for
their
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theirs
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. The best
time
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 in a
house
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,
i
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I
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 think in
summer
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,
this
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 is
a
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the
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 reason
in
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why in
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 the
summer
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, there are a lot of fruits
on
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in
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 the trees.
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 apples,
people
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 planted trees for
beuty
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beauty
 and in the future, they will have a lot of fruits to eat.
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, it will be great in
summer
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 but in the winter
the
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a
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 bad
time
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for
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to
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 live in
the
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a
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house
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 only
i
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in
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 villages.
this
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 is a cause they do not have gas or coal.
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 why, they will suffer
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if which
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which
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they
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 do not find
firewod
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firewood
. They have
animlas
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animals
such
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 as chickens, cows and pets,every
summer
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 they slaughter one cow or some chickens and eat them,most of the
time
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.
people
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 who live in a
house
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 seldom catch a cold and
never
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are never
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 ill. Living in a flat
is
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has
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 very impact
to
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on
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people
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.
this
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 is a reason, they do not have work excess. They only go to
the
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apply
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their
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apply
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work and
comback
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come back to
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 their homes. most of the
time
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,
people
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 who live in a flat, they
outweigt
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outweigh
.
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 is a result. they will early
died
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die
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 or get various diseases and
this
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 one in the future, causing them to suffer. I think, some
people
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very
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are very
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 lazy
which
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and
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 live in
a
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an
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 apartment. In conclusion,
live
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living
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 in a
house
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 better than
live
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living
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 in
an
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a
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 flat only in
summer
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, in the winter is
comfort
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a comfortable
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 flat to live
for
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in for
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people
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to indicate the main idea. This helps guide the reader through your arguments more effectively.
task achievement
Make sure to clearly distinguish between advantages and disadvantages in your essay to improve clarity and structure.
coherence and cohesion
Work on grammar and vocabulary to reduce inaccuracies, such as verb forms and article usage, which will enhance your expressions and ideas.
task achievement
You have expressed a clear preference for living in a house, which demonstrates your ability to present a viewpoint.
task achievement
Your essay attempts to provide examples to support your points, indicating a good effort to illustrate your arguments.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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