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Band 4

Universities and colleges are now offering courses through distance learning from the Internet rather than teachers in the classroom. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, most students get involved in
the
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distance learning from the internet which
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 by universities and colleges less than professional teachers in the classroom.
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 some people
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 that it
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 less effective than
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the classroom
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 but
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 suppose that both of them same thing and have drawbacks and benefits.

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Consider providing a clearer stance on whether you believe the advantages outweigh the disadvantages or vice versa. This will help clarify your position to the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Work on your logical structure by organizing your ideas more distinctly into paragraphs. Each paragraph should contain a clear main idea with supporting details.
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Incorporate specific examples to illustrate your points better. This could strengthen your arguments and make your essay more persuasive.
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You acknowledge both sides of the argument, which shows an understanding of the topic's complexity.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distance learning
  • flexibility
  • cost-effective
  • physical infrastructure
  • self-motivation
  • discipline
  • isolation
  • campus life
  • face-to-face interaction
  • immediate feedback
  • geographical limitations
  • disabilities
  • academic integrity
  • online environment
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