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You live in a block of flats, your neighbour makes a lot of noise which has caused problems for you. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter, you should: • explain the situation • tell him/her how you are affected by this • suggest what you want the landlord to do.

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Dear Andrew, I am Firdavs, who stays in your flat. You know, I have rented
B035
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a B035
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apartment
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 in New Life. I am writing
this
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 letter to draw your attention
about
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to
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noise
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the noise
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 which is produced by
neighbour
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a neighbour
the neighbour
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. I stay with my family in your
apartment
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. I and my
wife
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are always come
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always come
came
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 to our
apartment
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 exhausted.
Mr.
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Mr
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Bean,
works
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who works
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 in a company as a manager, is
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a drunkman
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drunkman
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drunk man
drunken
, and every night about 12-1 beats her
wife
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 and her
wife
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 screams loudly. As I mentioned, we come home tired, but we can't relax well because of
this
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 issue.
This
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 problem affects
to
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apply
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my
wife
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bad
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badly
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, she doesn't sleep well during the night. She
always
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is always
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 frightened by
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this
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these
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 screams. I would appreciate you, but not
this
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 time. The reason why I am writing
this
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 letter is that stop the noise from the
apartment
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which
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in which
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 Mr. Bean lives .I told
to
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apply
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this
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 neighbour about
this
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 problem, but he didn't hear me. I want
from
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apply
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you to tell him not to produce sounds throughout the night. If not, I leave your
apartment
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.
Waiting
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Waiting for
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 your reply
eagrly
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eagerly
early
. Best regards, Firdavs

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task achievement
Ensure correct spelling and grammatical forms, such as 'I'm' instead of 'I am' for a more conversational tone.
coherence and cohesion
Clarify the details around the noise complaint, ensuring that no misunderstandings occur. For example, specify the neighbor's behavior more clearly.
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Maintain a polite tone throughout and avoid personal remarks that may seem accusatory.
coherence and cohesion
You structured your letter well with an introduction, body, and conclusion.
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Your description of the situation is clear and provides context for your complaint.
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You made a clear request of what action you want the landlord to take.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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