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Band 5

Some construction work is being done on the street where you live for the last couple of days. The noise from the work is loud and it disturbs you. Write a letter to your local council complaining about the noise. In your letter, introduce yourself explain how the noise is causing problems to you suggest solutions to the problem

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 letter to inform you about some
unfavorable
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unfavourable

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 circumstances I am facing from some construction in our area. My name is Sadra Majidi, and I reside at Park Street where your corporation
have
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has

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 started building
apartment
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an apartment

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 complex.
This
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 residential area is incredibly crowded, inhabiting a vast amount of
household
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households

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. Your
labor
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labour

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 has been working
during
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apply

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round-the-clock with a lot of noise, regardless of time.
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 issue has disrupted our relaxation and sleep.
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, there is a small hospital in
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 neighborhood, and
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 loud noise
cloud
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could

The word cloud doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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 harm the patients there and cause desirable influences. I believe that your
labor
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labour

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 should work
in
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at

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 a certain time.
For instance
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, it would be better that they work
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apply

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from morning until evening and stop their work after dark. please I honestly request you to investigate properly and take action as soon as possible. Your positive solution will be very favorable for me and my neighbors. Yours faithfully, Sadra Majidi

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coherence
Consider enhancing the logical flow of your ideas by ensuring that each paragraph has a clear central theme. For example, separating the explanation of the noise problem from the suggested solutions could improve coherence.
cohesion
Make sure to proofread your letter for any grammatical errors or typos to ensure clarity and professionalism. For instance, 'cloud harm' should be 'could harm', and 'desirable influences' is unclear in this context.
task achievement
You have effectively introduced yourself and stated the purpose of your letter, which is essential in a formal communication.
task achievement
Your suggestions for a specific working timeframe for construction were clear and practical, showing you want a reasonable solution to the issue.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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