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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 chart demonstrates how families used their weekly
fund
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 in one country, comparing
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 between the two years1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, it is clear from the chart that, the average of weekly spending ranges from 5% of the weekly income to 35 %.
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, there is an obvious difference comparing those years, especially for the money spent on food went from 35% to 17%
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 1968 to 2018 respectively.
According to
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 what is shown, In 1968 the main focus was on food, personal goods, clothing and
foot ware
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footwear
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, fuel and Power.
whereas
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 in 2018, people began to limit the amount of their expenditure in some areas
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fuel and fund rate decreased from 7% to 3%, and for clothing and
foot ware
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 from 6% to 4%. In
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 of spending in 2018, it was mainly on leisure, reaching 23% compared to 1968
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 it was only 9%. Often, for
transport
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 the
ration
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ratio
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 even increased.
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, for housing ratio went to 19% from 10%.
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spending
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the spending
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 rate remained steady at 7% , for household goods in
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both year 1968 and 2018.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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