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The chart below gives information about European people of different age groups who went to gyms once a month or more between 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about European people of different age groups who went to gyms once a month or more between 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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line graph provides key information about citizens from different age groups who went to gyms one time or more two from 1990 to 2010.
Overall
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, it is clear from the diagrams four different experiences of information in the same period,
In addition
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, folks who are between 18 and 24 score the highest percentage,
on the other hand
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, humans who are 45 and over showed the lowest percentage.
According to
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 what is shown,18-24 starts at a ratio of nearly 10 and they got a slight increase and all of sudden, they went rapidly up until they reached nearly 51%.
While
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 25-34 showed every year a huge increase. 35-44 they start at approximately 5 and they represent yearly a rise up to the point of 40,
nevertheless
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, 45 and over they end at about 20.
To sum up
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, All of them end in a different
per cent
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percentage
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however
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,18-24 display the top,
while
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 45 and over illustrate the minimum.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Age group (noun): A range of ages categorized together.
  • Gym attendance (noun): The act of visiting or using a gym.
  • Trend (noun): A general direction in which something is developing or changing.
  • Decline (verb/noun): A decrease or loss in quality, quantity, or importance.
  • Fluctuate (verb): To change continually; to move up and down.
  • Peak (noun/verb): Reach the highest point.
  • Demographics (noun): Statistical data relating to the population and particular groups within it.
  • Health awareness (noun): Being conscious or informed about health issues.
  • Fitness culture (noun): A culture that promotes physical exercise and healthy living.
  • Stabilize (verb): To make or become unlikely to change or fluctuate.
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