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The given line graph represents the number of three types of distributes which were generate above twenty six years from 1981 to 2007

The given line graph represents the number of three types of distributes which were generate above twenty six years from 1981 to 2007
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The given line graph represents the number of three types of distributes which
were generate
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were generated
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above
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over
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twenty six
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twenty-six
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 years from 1981 to 2007.
Overall
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, the expenditure
of
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on
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 butter increased slightly
than
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more than
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other
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the other
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 two consumption in the initial time frame. But it decreased and intersected them
different
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in different
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 years.
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, low fat and reduced spreads joined later other products, it surged significantly. Obviously,
consumption
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the consumption
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 of two
item
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items
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 started
at since
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from
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 1981 till 2007, but
exeption
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exception
exemption
 on low fat and reduced spreads. It followed other goods from 1996 with its at about 10
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gramms
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grammes
grams
 and rose over the 80
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gramms
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grammes
grams
 five years later and
fel
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fell
feel
 slightly in
final
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the final
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 year to about 70
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gramms
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grammes
grams
. The butter and margarine one
was
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were
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 increased and one the other was decreasing and they levelled off in 1991, equal with their 100
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gramms
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grammes
grams
.
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Also
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 approximately, 90
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gramms
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grammes
grams
 of margarine was spent
whichin
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within
which in
 the initial year, after which
numeral
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the numeral
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 fluctuated slightly
reduced
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and reduced
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 to a low of 40
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gramms
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grammes
grams
 in
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last
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the last
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 year. Butter was the first spread initiated at about 145
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gramms
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grammes
grams
 and
then
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 went up 160
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gramms
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grammes
grams
 in 1986
plummed
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and plummed
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 dramatically to
near
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nearly
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 50
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gramms
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grammes
grams
 in the ultimate period.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gramms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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