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The diagrams below show the development of Porth Harbour between 2000 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the development of Porth Harbour between 2000 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two blueprints show the structures present in a harbour in 2000 and how it looks presently.
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, there is an increase in the number of
infrastucture
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infrastructure
 present and some buildings have been renovated for other purposes. Starting with the new structures, in 2000, there was only one dock present to receive
passangers
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passengers
 from ferries. Now, an extra dock has been created. Another building has been erected
to
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in
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 the southern area of the harbour which contains shower closets and toilets.
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, next to the lifeboat zone are cafes and shops which were absent in the past Turning to the refurbished sections, the marina area which holds private yachts and the zone allocated to fishing boats have been exchanged
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 that private yachts are now parked
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in
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 the
sothern
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southern
 region of the harbour
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 the fish boats are to the
nothern
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northern
.
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, the disused castle has been renovated to become a hotel and the public beach is now private to the hotel alone. Regarding transportation, unlike in 2000, where only one car park was connected to the main road, currently, the two car parks are linked to the main road.
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, there is built road that connects the hotel to other structures

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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