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The graph shows the number of deaths caused by terrorist attacks in three countries between 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of deaths caused by terrorist attacks in three countries between 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the number of deaths caused by terrorist attacks in Iraq,
Nigeria
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, and Afghanistan between 2011 and 2015.
Overall
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,
while
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 the death toll in all three countries slightly declined in 2012, Iraq and
Nigeria
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 saw dramatic increases, peaking in 2014 before dropping in 2015.
In contrast
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, Afghanistan experienced a steady rise throughout the period, eventually surpassing
Nigeria
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 in 2015. In 2011, approximately 3,000 people in Iraq and
Nigeria
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 lost their lives
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 terrorist attacks.
However
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, both figures dropped in 2012 before rising sharply, reaching peaks of over 9,000 and 7,000 deaths, respectively, in 2014.
Following
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this
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, both countries experienced a significant decline in fatalities in the final year.
Although
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 Afghanistan
initially
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 followed a similar trend, its death toll continuously increased after 2012. By 2015, it had surpassed
Nigeria
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, making it the second most affected country, with slightly over 5,000 deaths.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nigeria with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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