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The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought from supermarkets in European countries in 1998 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought from supermarkets in European countries in 1998 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 bar
charts
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 provides key information about the
propotion
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proportion
promotion
 of
food
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 and
goods
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 bought from
the
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apply
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supermarkts
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supermarkets
supermarket
 in European countries between 1998 and 2008.
Overall
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, it is clear from the diagrams that people who bought foods and
goods
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 in 2008 had the highest
buyer
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number of buyers
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,
while
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 in 1998 recorded the lowest in the three different
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country
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countries
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.
According to
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 what is shown,
food
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 in the first
country
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 began in 1998 at nearly 9
percent
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per cent
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,
while
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 in 2008 saw a significant increase among the consumer, and for the
goods
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 experienced
also
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 a dramatic climb meanwhile, in
second
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the second
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country
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 showed a minimal rise in both of
goods
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 and
food
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. In third
country
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 was the lowest consumer
between
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of
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 the other two
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country
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countries
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 it
recored
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recorded
in
food
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 at 10 in 2008 and in
goods
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 was at 10, both of them witnessed a marginal rise.
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, the first
country
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 had a rapid surge,
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, the second
country
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 peaked gradually,
whereas
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 the third
country
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 displayed the lowest in both
foods
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food
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 and
goods
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, goods, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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