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The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought from supermarkets in European countries in 1998 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought from supermarkets in European countries in 1998 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar graph describes the amount of
food
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 and goods bought from
supermarkets
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 in three different countries
during
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between
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 1998 and 2008. In
country
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 1, the percentage of
food
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 bought from
supermarkets
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 in 1998 was 10%. It is clear from the graph that
this
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 trend has increased to 40% in 2008. In
country
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 2, in the year 1998, more than 20% of
food
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 was bought from
supermarkets
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 and
has
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observed only a slight increase in 2008.
Country
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 3 has exhibited a similar trend as
of
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country
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 2.
in
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 1998 the amount of
food
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 bought from
supermarkets
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 stayed below 10% and in 2008, it reached
upto
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up to
 10%. in
country
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 1 the percentage of goods
boughts
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bought
 from
supermarket
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supermarkets
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 in the year 1998 was more than 10%. A steep increase was displayed in the following years reaching 60% in 2008.
Country
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 2 and
country
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 3
shows
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show
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 only a
little
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small
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 increase from 1998 to 2008.
Country
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 3 is the least among all three in purchasing
food
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 and goods from
supermarkets
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,
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however
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however,
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country
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 1 exhibited an enormous
differnce
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difference
 in both the years.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, supermarkets, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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