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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995- 2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995- 2002.
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The bar chart gives information about the total amount of
minutes
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 of telephone calls in the United Kingdom, which is divided into three call types, between 1995 and 2002.
Overall
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, in 1995, the total number of
minutes
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 used was approximately 72
billion
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.
This
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 figure experienced a steady
increase
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, reaching a peak of 90
billion
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minutes
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 in 1999."
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whereas
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 there was a continuing trend in the national and international and mobile call types. The total number of
minutes
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 used in 1995 was around 72
billion
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.
This
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 figure witnessed a steady
increase
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 and reached a peak was 90
billion
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minutes
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 in 1999.
However
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,
this
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 number decreased significantly to approximately 72
billion
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minutes
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 by the final year. In 1995, national and international calls accounted for nearly 40
billion
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minutes
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, and
this
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 figure rose significantly to 52
billion
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minutes
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 by 2002. Mobile calls had the lowest recorded
minutes
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 among all categories in 1995, at around 4
billion
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.
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,
this
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 category saw a remarkable
increase
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, rising to 45
billion
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minutes
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 by 2002, an
increase
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 of approximately 41
billion
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, billion, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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