some people feel that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the country side. discuss both sides and give your opinion

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world, many population prefer to
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in inner
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contrast same individuals who feel better in the rural. In
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views and I say my own view.
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with, in recent years, there
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significant increases inside
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in addition
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, there are a lot of reasons to move
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development
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cities
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better infrastructure like transportation.
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, the
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afforded good service
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new
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lifestyle, so we found the
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who in
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. Wheras there same constraints to
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in urban
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one of
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downside
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is overpopulation
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when their leave home to
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to work or school .
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, living in
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is make
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people
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connected with
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more than
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population who live in urban
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reasons to live there . Plus, the
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who like relaxing and quiet there tend to
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their homes to live in rural places. To be honest , I personally prefer the rural
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more than
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cities
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,
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disadvantages one of
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it's
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the services of the internet
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slower than
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cities
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the
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people
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are soicalable.  In conclusion, the countryside
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less populated these days
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when going to rural places we have a good time to refreshment ourselves,
nonetheless
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most of our residents prefer
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inside the city.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • metropolitan
  • amenities
  • congestion
  • rural
  • serenity
  • sustainable living
  • commute
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • tranquility
  • pros and cons
  • lifestyle
  • work-life balance
  • wellbeing
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