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Some people believe that planing for the future is a waste of time because they think that focusing on the present is more important. To what extent do you agree or disagree. Angsa

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Recently, some
people
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 belive that planing for the
future
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 is not nessury just loss the time .
While
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 other human think
future
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 plans is essential to enhance qulity of
life
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 and focusing gouls. In
this
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 essay, I will examine my perspectives and present my personal opinion.
On the other hand
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, Some individuals think that drowing goals for tomorrow is important for clear goats achievement.
To begin
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 with,
future
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 Study. Some
people
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 get higher education is essential for
work
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.
For
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example
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: get master for promotion at
work
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 .
Secondly
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, planing for great
work
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. Different persons belive that important to receive good job at great countire,
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example
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:
work
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 at Frinch as a professor.
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, open a private busines .
people
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 think own busines is important to invest thier mony.
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: There are studies from Uk universety for
people
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 planing for
future
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 and open own busines they are smart
people
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 a will successful in their
life
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 almost 90% . For my opinion I agree with that point.
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, other
people
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 they do not agree with that point . Most
people
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 think that focusing on present
life
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 is more essential for different reason. Fristly, studing to get good mark is important.
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: douing well in the semester to get high gread.
Secondly
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, hard working in the
work
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. More and more individuals see that good
work
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 help them to get promotion in thier job.
For
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example
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: from teacher to head of department.
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, many human focusing on daily tasks.
For
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example
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: house needing or some responcepalties on
life
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. Conclusion, pased on the points manchiend,
It is clear that
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 planing for
future
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 is more essential and has substantial and outweigh focusing on present.

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language
Focus on improving spelling and grammar errors, such as 'planing' instead of 'planning' and 'nesessry' instead of 'necessary'.
coherence
Ensure paragraphs have clear topic sentences and maintain a unified focus throughout. This will improve the logical structure of your essay.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples and evidence to support your arguments, especially when discussing the importance of planning for the future.
task achievement
You successfully presented both sides of the argument, showing that you understand differing perspectives.
coherence
Your conclusion summarizes the main points effectively, reinforcing your opinion on the topic.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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