Some people believe that having a university degree is essential for getting a good job, while others think that work experience is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.”

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There are different views on whether
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certificate is the best choice to secure a perfect career. Or the employers’ value and experience in the
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more important than a university degree. My opinion is that prestigious jobs need hard to have certain
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jobs
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. On the one hand, some
people
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prefer to get university
qualification
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qualifications
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.
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,
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previous suggestion is considered as an essential prior regarding
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a lot of
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.
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is because
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reasons.
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, often, the highest monthly fees are related to
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and experiences which owners of the job have .
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, my brother graduated from
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,
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that, he had a professional occupation with a good salary.
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of features contented a number of academic experiences and approval
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criteria
to achieve usual success during the
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. So, the principles of the cost is a crucial aspect
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a good job in
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case.
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, the practical and cultural activities add
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beneficial results for the workers who will
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in educational sectors in
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future. To illustrate, my sister will be a teacher after she has got formal
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at
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.
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activity will
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her to gain
this
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career. Because it Is a necessary condition to be a teacher in the
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in today's world.
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, there are many
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that personal abilities
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as, secondary
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degrees enough
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to have a suitable place to
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.
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, some careers need a simple score from the
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the individuals to
work
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in formal jobs.
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, my uncle is working in
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company now, despite, the shortest skills that he
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in his elementary
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.
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,
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courses from
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company,
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he is acquiring a a perfect office in his
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.
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, multiple potentials for the public are selected a propitiate assessments in
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situation.
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, years of the
experiences
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experience
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sometimes give many information and
knoewldges
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knowledge
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to the person who would
work
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. To classify, I remembered my friend when he was working as an engineer for nine years without any mathematical logical linking to have.
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, he had a special occupation. In conclusion, despite
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the variety
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of opinions regarding
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some
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, if
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succeed in our duties today needed more qualities to
applied
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advanced business or it depends on other values to reach
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. My opinion is,
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that diploma
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degrees are
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an accurate
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aspect to gain in our
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recent
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days.

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task achievement
Clarify your main argument in the introduction and ensure it clearly presents your viewpoint.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs for better coherence. Use linking words more effectively.
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Provide clearer examples and tie them back to your argument more directly.
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You present a balanced view of both sides of the argument, which is commendable.
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Some examples provided are relatable and relevant to the topic.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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