Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult such as sahara desert and antartica. what are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists to visit such placthates.

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health and the economy states.

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Ensure your introduction clearly states the topic and outlines your main argument or stance. It's important to define whether you agree with the advantages or disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
Use conjunctions and linking phrases to connect your ideas more fluidly. For instance, 'Additionally,' 'Moreover,' or 'Furthermore' can improve transitions between sentences and paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Double-check for spelling and grammar mistakes as they can affect clarity. For example, the word ‘experiance’ should be 'experience'.
task achievement
You successfully identified both the benefits and disadvantages of traveling to challenging climates, which shows a good understanding of the topic.
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You used examples, such as the climate of Saudi Arabia, to support your points, which adds depth to your argument.

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