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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a paritcular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a paritcular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line chart depicts the number of newcomers, who visited a specific Caribbean island in the seven-year period.
Overall
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, one can notice that the number of
people
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 staying on
island
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the island
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 started as a more popular option, but
an
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the
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 amount of
people
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 who chose to stay on cruise ships overtook
throughout
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it throughout
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 time. To look into details, the total amount of
people
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 staying on the island began at the rate of 1
million
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 sharp and rose steadily, before levelling off at 2,75
million
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of
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guests in 2015.
However
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, in 2017 it peaked at the rate of 3,5
million
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people
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 sharp. The number of
people
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 living on land was equal to 750 thousand visitors in 2010 and rose to 1,5
million
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 in 2013. After remaining unchanged for a three-year period, it fell slightly to 1,25
million
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 and increased back to 1,5
million
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 visitors.
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, the amount of
people
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 staying on a ship started at 250 thousand
people
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 and varied around 500 and 250 thousand in the following 4 years. Over the next 4 year period the rate went up steadily to 2
million
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 visitors in 2017.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • upward trend
  • steady increase
  • peak
  • stabilization
  • notable change
  • market saturation
  • seasonal variations
  • tourism infrastructure
  • external factors
  • global economic conditions
  • persistent popularity
  • demand patterns
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