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Band 4.5

Some people want governments to spend money looking for life on other planets. Others, however, think this is a waste of public money when there are so many problems on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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some people believe that governments must spend their budget to
looking
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 for life on other planets. At the same time, several people argue that
because
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it is a waste of
money
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 when our planet has troubles
such
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 as global warming. In
this
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 essay, we will discuss both points of view. On the one hand, spending
money
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 on the space and planet is a common idea that several
researcher
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researchers
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 agree with it. Because there are many
outsiden
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outside
 lands which
similar
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are similar
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 to the nature of
earh
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earth
each
 and we can spend
money
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 to explore
it
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them
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.
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,
The
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Mars has
a special elements
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a special element
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 that it is useful for our manufacturing. many countries
which
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export that elements
such
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Mar's
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 gold. that will
make
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 more benefits
for
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 the general
econmy
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economy
.
on the other hand
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, a lot of people show the opposite that it is wasting of budgets without
an
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noteacible
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notable
incomes
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 to the public
money
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. and we should give the
priorty
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priority
 to
problrms
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problems
 on many regions.
for instance
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,
the
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global warming is the most dangerous trouble in
this
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 decade, it will cost
several
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a lot of
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money
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 to fix it in only particular lands.
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as
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 a result, it's essential to spend
money
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 to find solutions
instead
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 of
a
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future plans. to
sup
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sum
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 up,
this
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 idea has advantages and disadvantages
in
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on
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 both
side
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sides
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. the first one is the benefits of
visitng
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visiting
 planets and
build
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 projects there.
in contrast
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, our planet requires more interest in many places. in my opinion, the second statement is important to keep ourselves in
safe
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a safe
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 situation

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task achievement
Ensure that the introduction clearly states your own opinion, as this helps guide the reader through the essay. Try to restate key points from each perspective more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the flow of ideas by using clearer transitions between sentences and paragraphs. This can help your overall coherence and make it easier for the reader to follow your logic.
lexical resource
Try to avoid repetitive phrases and use a wider range of vocabulary to improve your lexical resource. For example, instead of repeating 'spending money,' consider synonyms like 'investing funds' or 'allocating budget.'
grammatical range and accuracy
Take care when using singular/plural nouns, such as 'earh' (Earth) and 'outsiden lands' (outer lands, etc.). This clarity falls under grammar and supports overall coherence.
content
The essay presents both sides of the argument, which is essential for fulfilling the task requirements.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented opportunities
  • extraterrestrial
  • satisfy human curiosity
  • practical benefits
  • inspiring goal
  • testament to human ambition
  • pursuit of knowledge
  • critics argue
  • imprudent
  • plague Earth
  • immediate attention
  • allocated for
  • environmental conservation
  • well-being
  • quality of life
  • balanced approach
  • advancements
  • benefits for humanity
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