There have been some problems with the public transport you use to commute daily. Write a letter to the manager of the public transport company.

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Dear
sir
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or Madam,
l
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am writing to bring to your attention a bus issue .
l
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have been
experecing
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experiencing
bad drivers and
out of order
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places,which have significantly affected my work and personal life.
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have been using transport for
3years
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3 years
and
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have never faced
such
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kind of
problem
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.
Firstly
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, two
weaks
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weeks
ago your driver was drunk despite driving
bus
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the bus
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. It is really
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problem
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a problem
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to
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for
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passengers,
moreover
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, it can
make
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cause
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big
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a big
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problem
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problems
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.
Secondly
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, when
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got on the autobus,
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noticed that there
is
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no clean place to sit down. It
decreas
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decreases
you
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commuter. I would like to know that
this
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problem
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is not only an inconvenience, but
also
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a loses
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loses
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loss
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users
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of users
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.
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However
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you have cheap service , especially considering the importance of internet connectivity in today’s digital age. I hope you can take steps to make sure
this
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mistake does not happen again. Yours faithfully, Javoxir Nursaidov

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tone
Try to use a more formal greeting like 'Dear Sir/Madam' and make sure to capitalize 'I'. Also, avoid using informal phrases such as 'kind of problem' and strive for more formal language.
coherence
Ensure that you flow your ideas logically. You could start by mentioning your regular usage of the service, the overall impact of the problems on your commuting experience, and then detailed issues.
accuracy
Check for spelling and grammatical errors such as 'experecing', 'weaks', 'decreas', and 'autobus' to improve the overall quality of your letter.
content
You clearly stated the purpose of your letter at the beginning and expressed your concerns. It shows your engagement regarding the issues faced.
clarity
You included specific examples, which is great as it helps convey the seriousness of the problems.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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