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Writing Samples
Band 2

You booked a two-week holiday to Sydney with a tour agency. You are not happy with the holiday – the flight was delayed, the hotel was noisy, and so on.

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Dear
sir
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Sir
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 or
madam
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Madam
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, I am writing
this
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 letter with
purpose
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the purpose
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 of complaining about your
hotel
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service
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. Recently, I stayed at your
hotel
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to
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for
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 3 or 4 days and I
encounter
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encountered
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 several problems here. I had heard many good things about
this
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hotel
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. But, When I saw
there
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it there
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, I
am
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was
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 very dissatisfied and disappointed. I would like to start by pointing out the fact that the
hotel
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service
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 is at a low level. The room
service
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 was extremely slow and
food
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the food
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service
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 was not good.
Secondly
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, the
hotel
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 rooms are a bit old and set up inconvenient
bed
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beds
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.
In addition
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that
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apply
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, beddings were not well washed and ironed which
given
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was given
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 to me. It
was
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apply
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irretated
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irritated
 me. In my opinion,
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this problems
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this problem
these problems
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do
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are
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 not suitable,
the
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for the
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 reputation of your
hotel
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 To tackle
this
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 issue, I would like to suggest that you should take control seriously. Thank you for your attention to
this
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 letter. I look forward to receiving a prompt reply of your earliest
canvience
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convenience
. Yours faithfully Jessica Alba.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your purpose of writing in the introduction. It's good to be specific about your concerns right at the beginning.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your conclusion summarizes your main points and states what action you seek from the hotel. This would provide a solid end to your letter.
coherence and cohesion
Use more varied vocabulary and sentence structures to enhance clarity and interest. For example, consider phrases like 'I was particularly disappointed with...' instead of 'I am very dissatisfied'.
coherence and cohesion
Work on the grammatical structure, particularly with verb tenses and prepositions to enhance the readability of your sentences.
task achievement
The letter clearly communicates dissatisfaction and provides specific examples of the problems faced.
coherence and cohesion
The overall organization of the letter is logical, making it easy to follow despite some grammatical errors.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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