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My goal: Band 6.5-7.0 In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasize that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am going to have a short trip to Singapore,
ona
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one
 of the most beautiful and attractive European countries and it continues
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 least 5 days.
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 I am in Singapore, I want to rent a flat with a balcony. I am going to describe what is necessary for me .
Espically
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, I need a large fitness room and a big garden. I always go to the gym in my country with my friends after
the
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work . So, it is important for my health and keeps me fit. And my best friend Johanna who is absolutely gorgeous,
jet-black
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 hair and pale blue eyes, lives there. I am going to be in Singapore from March 10th to 15th, because my best friend's birthday is on March 11th. Please, can you send me information about
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prices
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proces
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process
 to my e-mail, [email protected]. Yours sincerely, Mokhinur Nematova

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grammar
Make sure to proofread the email for grammar and spelling mistakes, such as 'ona' instead of 'one' and 'proces' instead of 'prices'.
structure
Provide a clearer structure to your email by organizing it into paragraphs, which will improve readability and coherence.
content
Include more specific details about the flat you want to rent, for example, the number of rooms or the area you prefer.
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The email has a friendly tone and effectively conveys your personal connection to Singapore through your friend's birthday.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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