In many countries, good schools and medical facilities are available only sin cities. Some people think new teachers and doctors should work in rural areas for a few years, but others think everyone should be free to choose where they work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In many developing countries, rural
areas
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are still lacking basic necessities
such
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as quality education, medical care and infrastructure. Some
people
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argue that newly graduated professionals should do
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an imternship
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imternship
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internship
internships
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work
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in rural
areas
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in their initial period
while
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others believe that they are free to choose where they
work
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. In
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essay, I will discuss both perspectives and give my opinion. On the one hand, many
students
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are prone to challenges and struggles to pursue their dream jobs. Most of them are financially unstable and
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educational loans for their studies.
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, some
students
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work
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in
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part-time to meet the educational expenses.
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, To become a doctor, approximately 30 lakhs are required in India and it is a huge cost for
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people
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. So, most
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either take loans or
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debt when they are graduating. So compelling them to
work
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in rural
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are
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not morally correct and they have the right to
work
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in preferred locations.
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, some
people
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believe that professionals should
work
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in rural
areas
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during their early period since most of them are studied with the help of
scholerships
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scholarships
and incentives provided by
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the government
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which are actually
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's
tax
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taxes
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.
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, South Korea has
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a mandatory
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1 year Internship in rural
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for all qualified professionals.
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This postings
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could enhance the service
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mindset. Since
,
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apply
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most graduated
students
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face
people
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struggles in rural
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it prevents them from bribery and corruption in future. In conclusion, even though a compulsory rural posting is helpful for
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needy
people
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it is impractical for implementation. So, I strongly agree that
people
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have
their
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rights
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right
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to choose where they want to
work
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.
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, service
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intentions
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should not be imposed on
people
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but should come from their
heart
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hearts
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.

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coherence
Try to improve the clarity of your arguments by providing more detailed explanations and connections between points. For instance, explain how the issues faced by students relate to the concept of working in rural areas.
task achievement
The essay presents a balanced discussion of both views, which is essential in a discussion-type essay.
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