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The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012.

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012.
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of bodies who arrived at news from four different sources from 1995 and projection to 2025.
Overall
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 , it can be seen that the trend for
the
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percentage of
people
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 preferred TV newspaper, and radio sources to access the news in the past, but in
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 they will choose the internet to know the world news. As the graph shows,the rate of
people
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 who used newspapers and radio was almost
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the same during the period from 1995 to 2025. After that, there was a fall steadily between 1995 and 2010 in the
number
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 of
people
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 , which is the proportion has reached to just over 40 %.
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 , the
number
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 of
people
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 witnessed a plummet to just below 30%.
On the other hand
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 , from 1995 to 2000 there was a remain stable
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the
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number
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 of who used the Internet to watch events
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happening in the world . Meanwhile , the rate rocketed to just above 50% in the
last
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 5 years . The
last
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 Source is TV , which was in a state of fluctuation ,
moreover
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, the
number
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 of
people
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 in the first years who watched television was Just under 70 % ,
then
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 it went down in the
last
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 four years .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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