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In many countries, women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household tasks. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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 work equally with
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 throughout the
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 on each other . In my opinion, equally engaging in employment appears to be rational .
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 , will lead to a logical conclusion. Analyzing the statement and explaining
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, the first and foremost reason behind
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 equality and
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 gender discrimination and stereotypes. Another striking benefit in
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 equally towards their expenses , it prevents burnout and
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 a more balanced lifestyle. Categorically discussing , it cannot be ignored that sharing tasks can lead to
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more faith and respect in each other , they are able to see each other's ability and strength.
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 , cooperation with each other can strengthen
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 by fostering communication and understanding. Probing ahead , one of the main underlying
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 stems from the fact
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that , if
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women
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 and men will both agree to work outside ,
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 they can save more money for their future and will give
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childrens
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. They can go on
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vacations
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, on dinners which
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long - term
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relationship
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. In conclusion to the
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 aforementioned above , I strongly believe that sharing homework and outside work is
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totally
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 life .

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The introduction could be clearer about your position. Make sure to clearly state your agreement or disagreement with the topic right at the beginning.
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Try to use transition words (like 'however', 'furthermore') to improve the flow between your ideas and paragraphs.
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Consider using more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention specific types of chores or ways that sharing tasks can improve relationships or financial situations.
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Your essay addresses the topic of shared responsibilities well, showing an understanding of gender roles and household dynamics.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender equality
  • Division of labor
  • Household chores
  • Work-life balance
  • Burnout
  • Efficiency
  • Workload distribution
  • Professional advancement
  • Gender roles
  • Cooperation
  • Mutual respect
  • Communication
  • Partnership
  • Stereotypes
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