Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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Literature

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gives a chance to catch different knowledge and improve

students

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' thinking,

describing

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and describing

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skills. Teaching the

literature

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of their own

country

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and foreign

countries

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both give them

bright

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improvement on their studying. From my

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I teach different topics

taking

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from different

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countries

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literature

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. The reason I take different information

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let them know different

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culture

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, different

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history

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various art

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styles

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. Learning the

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makes children more intelligent and improves their

elligance

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elegance

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students

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extend their understanding of life

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can obtain different

experience

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while

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learning it. When reading other

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countries

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history readers understand how the exact

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could exist, how

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inheritances

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spent their power,

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inspiration

, valuable time so on. The

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history presents

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eesential

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essential

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, how the

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was

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established

, where

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located

, what are the people like, how large

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territory is,

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and what

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is the weather like

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and so on. Knowing all

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above mentioned

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information gives us a chance to

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from one place to

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ones

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. Learning art wides our eyes. Building styles, monuments,

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musiems

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museums

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allows

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us to see and

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learn

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culture

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cultures

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improves

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intelligence

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, dancing, drawing,

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students

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' wish and interest.

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end

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why I prefer to teach children from different

countries

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literature

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is the best way for

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students'multiple

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students multiple

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as drawing, musical, interpersonal, intrapersonal,

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phisycal

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physical

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for their creative thinking.

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coherence and cohesion

Enhance the logical flow of your ideas by using clear topic sentences for each paragraph. Ensure that each paragraph has a single main idea that ties back to your thesis.

task achievement

Make sure to fully develop your arguments, explaining how teaching both domestic and foreign literature benefits children's education over time.

language accuracy

Correct spelling and grammar issues for better readability, such as 'elligance' (elegance), 'insperation' (inspiration), 'musiums' (museums), and 'phisycal' (physical).

argument clarity

Your essay presents a clear position on the importance of teaching children literature from both their own country and foreign countries, which is a strong foundation for your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

244 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Native literature
Cultural identity
Heritage
Traditions
National pride
Language skills
Idiomatic expressions
Engagement
Relatability
Broaden perspectives
Cultural awareness
Open-mindedness
Literary heritage
Bias
Diverse perspectives
Global community
Domestic vs. international literature
Cultural nuances
Sense of belonging

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Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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It could be argued that technology makes our lives easier and simpler. But there are certainly people who feel life has become more complicated due to modern inventions. Which opinion do you agree with? In your essay, include supporting details.