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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areasin different parts of the world

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areasin different parts of the world
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The bar chart depicts the proportion of
peoples
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people
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 who live in urbanized locations in various places of the globe By and large, generally, urbanisation is in an increasing trend, with variable percentages.
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 North America accounted
the
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for the
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 highest figure of
population
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the population
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 living in cities, nowadays and in the future,
African
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the African
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 population registers the lowest ratio of living in
the
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municipal sites. In terms of North America, in 1950 64 percent of citizens were living in urban areas.
This
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 figure increased to 70% in 2007 and
expected
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is expected
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 to be 90% by 2050. Caribbean countries,
as well as
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Europe
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Europe,
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 have almost followed the same trend, with slightly less ratios.
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, it is obvious that Asia and Africa both experience the same proportion of urban population.
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 to say, in 1950 they were 17% and 15%, respectively. These figures ascended gradually to 41% and 37% and
predicted
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are predicted
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 to be 66% and 62%, in orders.
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, Oceania rates 62% of citizens who preferred to live in cities.
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 figure rose to 71% in 2007
,
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 and
supposed
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 to be 76% in 2050.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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