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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates some information about how much percentage that families in one country spent their weekly between 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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 , it can be seen that spending
for
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on
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 housing , transport and leisure
were
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apply
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went up
drammatically
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dramatically
. Meanwhile, the quantity of food , clothing and
footware
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footwear
 and personal goods
were went
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went
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 down significantly from 1968 to 2018. As can be clearly seen from the chart in 1968 , the figures
of
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for
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 food
was
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were
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highest
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the highest
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, accounting for 35
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percent
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per cent
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. Another , the proportion of housing ,
leisure
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and leisure
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were
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was
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 higher than the percentage of fuel and power , at 10
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percent
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per cent
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, well under 10
perccent
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per cent
 and just over 5
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percent
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per cent
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 respectively.
According to
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 the chart in 2018 , the proportion of leisure rocketed
drammatically
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dramatically
at
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to
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 23
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percent
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per cent
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while
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 the figures
of
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for
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 food went down significantly well under 20
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percent
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per cent
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.
Moreover
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, the quantity of housing,
transport
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and transport
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were
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was
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 higher than the percentage of household
good
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goods
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, with 19
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percent
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per cent
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, well under 15
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percent
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per cent
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 and just over 5
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percent
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per cent
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 respectively .
Finally
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 ,
fewest
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the fewest
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 people
who
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apply
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spent
in
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apply
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weekly was fuel and power accounting for 4
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percent
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per cent
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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