The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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the proportions of working hours spent on various activities in a single country in 1958 and 2008.

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, most citizens spent time working and sleeping, over the

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50-year

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period, and people significantly

reduce

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going out with friends/family.

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with, working has been the most initiated activity since 1958, with 33% of individuals, and figures

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to rise to 42% in 2008. Followed by sleeping in both

years

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started

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at just 1 % below working in 1958.

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this

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activity

still

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second working,

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have

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been

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% decrease from the

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years

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, falling to 25%.

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sleeping experienced a decline in interest, other areas

such

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as relaxing at home, and travel to work have

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over the

years

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, starting at 8% and 2% in 1958, soaring to 13% and 8% respectively. Despite most activities witnessing little changes over the

years

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, going out either with family or

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friends

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has shown the most changes, declining from the third most common

activities

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activity

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in 1958, with 19% interest, dropping to the least favourite at 6% in 2008.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

178 words

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