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Band 1

Argument: Every year several languages die out. This is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Thousands of
languages
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this
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 world relatively disappear every year,
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 some people say that it is
good
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a good
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 situation that fewer
languages
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 mean less harder to communicate in the world. in my perspective, people should
reserve
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preserve
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 the disappearing
languages
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 to keep
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diversity and prevent cultural loss. Many
Languages
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is
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are
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 being deleted by the upcoming
of
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western
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 culture, Especially, American Culture
that
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 has been
asimilated
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assimilated
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Asian
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 countries. New generations tend to speak in their dialects decreasingly;
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, Most
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languages
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 like
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, Ainu,
Aka-Bo
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and Aka-Bo
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was
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 deteriorating during the Colonial era. The disappearing language usage can cause
the
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cultural loss.

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language
Rephrase some sentences for clarity and grammatical accuracy. For example, change 'good situation' to 'a positive situation' and 'less harder' to 'less difficult.'
content
Expand on your arguments to provide a more comprehensive view, perhaps addressing counterarguments to improve the depth of your essay.
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Your essay presents a clear stance against the idea that language loss is beneficial, showing strong personal conviction.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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