You recently bought an electronic device from a store, but it is not working properly. Write a letter to the store manager. In your letter: Describe the problem with the device. Explain what you have done to try to resolve the issue. State what you would like the manager to

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Respected sir

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Dear Sir

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, I hope you are doing well. I have been a loyal customer and purchasing electronic devices since 2014.

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Last

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saturday

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Saturday

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, I brought a Smart Phone from your shop and it is having some malfunctions. I purchased a Sony SmartPhone and Bluetooth Speakers in your discount sale.

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, it was in good condition until Wednesday after that it is not working properly. I am having issues with

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the display

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and sometimes

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the touch

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screen is not responding. Since I thought it

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a minor bug so I restarted the mobile and updated the Operating System but

still

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still,

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the issue

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not resolved. I even tried to delete the excess storage but the problem was still there. I kindly request you to replace the mobile with

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one. I would like you to look into

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complaint and resolve it as soon as possible. Even one of

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your friend

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friend

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encountered with same problem with your mobile. I look forward

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your prompt response Yours faithfully, Santhoshkumar

ksanthosh701Fri Feb 14 2025

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Consider adding more details about the specific malfunction and your troubleshooting process to enhance the completeness of your response.

coherence and cohesion

Try to improve the clarity by ensuring that each paragraph focuses on a single idea more distinctly.

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Polite and respectful tone is maintained throughout the letter.

coherence and cohesion

The letter follows a logical structure with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

164 words

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