You recently did a short cookery course.The cookery school has asked for you feedback on this course.Write a letter to the course direktor ay the cookery school.

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Dear Madam/Sir I am Umirzokova Zarnigor.I learnt the art of

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jam making

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from your institute,which conducted a crash course on cookery for people in our locality.It was an enjoyable experience.The teaching staff was accommodating. I made a strawberry

jam

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for my son's birthday party, and my relatives appreciated it very much.Some of them demanded more.I followed the guidance given in your cookery class.I picked medium ripe fruits,cleaned them the way you

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me to,sliced them the way my relatives would like,sterilized the jars used to store

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,and used sugar and lemon as preservatives.The

jam

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was a big hit at the birthday party.I have stored some

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in the refrigerator as well. I would like you to start another crash on the art of pickling.I am sure it would be beneficial, and many would

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. Thanks again for

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a fantastic course!!! Yours sincerely, Umirzokova Zarnigor

uluga2002Fri Feb 14 2025

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The letter has a warm and engaging tone, which is appropriate for feedback.

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You provided specific examples of what you learned, making your feedback more meaningful.

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If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

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7 paragraphs

145 words

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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