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In recent years, there has been a rise in the use of performance-enhancing drugs in sports. What are the consequences of doping for athletes? What measures should be taken to combat this issue?

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Sportmen
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Sportsmen
 have increasingly been consuming energy-enhancing substances in order to perform well for the past years. They may risk their health conditions by being doped and  supervisors should strengthen drug detection measures. Having aspired to achieve
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 heights, people consume specific substances, which lead to
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long-term health implications. Not only do sportsmen use up all energy supplies by stimulating their brains and muscles, but they
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 have a tendency to need
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similar drugs to function properly.
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, statistics thoroughly provided by the Sport and Health Association show that 62% of individuals, who
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 performance-enhancing supplements, are prone to encounter various detrimental effects of drugs after their
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 and necessities to the medications.
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,
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measures of strengthening dope detection ought to be implemented to combat
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 concern. If legal implications are made by the superior authorities, athletes will be aware of problems that they face
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 as penalties or right-deprivation to participate in the
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further
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 several
sport
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 events.
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, athletes in Kazakhstan, after being harshly penalised and disqualified for doping violations at the Olympic Games in London 2012, ceased to commit illegal consumption during the next competitions. In conclusion, the consumption of substances has represented
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 growing trend in
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recent years.
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 may cause harmful consequences
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well-being
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 of athletes and stricter regulations ought to be activated to eradicate the issue.

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task achievement
Clarify your points by providing more detailed explanations or examples for the consequences of doping. This will help to support your main points more effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use varied sentence structures to enhance the flow of your ideas. This will improve your overall coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
The essay addresses the topic and responds to the task by discussing the consequences of doping and suggesting measures to combat it.
coherence and cohesion
There is a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame the discussion.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Performance-enhancing drugs (PEDs)
  • Doping
  • Anabolic steroids
  • Health ramifications
  • Stigmatization
  • Disqualification
  • Anti-doping agencies
  • Therapeutic Use Exemptions (TUEs)
  • Integrity of sports
  • Biological passport
  • In-competition testing
  • Out-of-competition testing
  • Whistleblower
  • Ban substances
  • Suspension
  • World Anti-Doping Agency (WADA)
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