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Many people cant speak or present well in public, an idea is to start training from the school.State if it is important to speak well in public.Do you agree or disagree.

Addressing in public is one of the powers that an individual has he can not be beaten in any aspect of life. Many people are shy or for any reason, they can not speak well in society,
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 their childhood development. I firmly agree with
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, a human should have enough courage in them to ask for their rights or to talk in general.
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, we should know that speaking in front of people and speaking feebly are two opposite things. A confident and wise
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 will know what and when to say, but a silly
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 won't know it. We first need to understand the art of speaking.
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, a positive
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 will first try to analyze others' questions,
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, a brainless
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 will start to speak without understanding other's intentions.
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, to learn the
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 of addressing, an individual should start doing work on it from his childhood, school is the best institute to develop these skills. A fair amount of people, hesitate to speak on stage,
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 of confidence, as
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 confidence can only be built in school. Students need to participate in assemblies,
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 competitions, they should try their best to become the monitor of their section, the they would realize that speaking is not only talking but it is a
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 to convince or convey your thoughts to your listeners.
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, speaking is a
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 and power if a student masters
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skill
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 at an early age he can convey his thoughts even to the prime minister in
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 manner.
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 is the only thing that a human being needs to be expert in.

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Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction could be more engaging and directly state your thesis. Consider rephrasing for clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph clearly ties back to the main argument of the essay. The links between ideas could be stronger.
Task Achievement
Use more specific examples or scenarios to support your points, especially in the second body paragraph. This will enhance your argument.
Task Achievement
Your essay addresses the importance of public speaking and provides a clear position on the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have made a good attempt to explain the skills needed for effective public speaking.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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