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Some says that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others To what extent do you agree or disagree

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There is
saying
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a saying
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 from some
people
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 that the
exsiting
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exciting
existing
 thing about being wealthy is that you can help
people
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, and I
stronlgy
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strongly
 agree
becuse
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because
 it's
realy
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really
 a good thing that you can help
people
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succiede
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succeed
succeeded
 in
thier
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their
 life. When
somone
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someone
 is wealthy and has lots of money
this
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 will give him
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the advantages
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advantages
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advantage
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to help
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of helping
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 poor
people
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 or his family,
becuse
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because
 life
could
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can
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 be
difficults
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difficult
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people
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 and there is nothing greater than the feeling of
happenies
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happening
 to the one you love or the
people
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 around you. A study conducted by
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an organazation
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organazation
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organisation
 shows that a rich person is happy when he can buy the thing he wants, but he
become
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becomes
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happiers
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happier
happiest
 when he
start
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starts
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 to help
people
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 in need
for
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of
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 money,
as
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for
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 example paying
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for scholorships
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scholorships
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scholarships
 for
student
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students
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 to study and become a doctor or engineer to make impact in society.
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, being rich is a good thing in life but the best thing about it
,
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apply
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 is the
chances
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chance
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 you can do it to help
people
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.

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coherence and cohesion
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language accuracy
Proofread your essay for spelling and grammatical errors, as these can distract from your overall message and make your points less clear.
task achievement
Try to provide a wider range of specific examples to support your points, as this strengthens your argument and makes it more convincing.
task achievement
You express a strong belief in the value of helping others, which demonstrates a clear perspective on the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your concluding statement reinforces your main argument, emphasizing the importance of using wealth to benefit others.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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