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Band 3

Some people think sport is important to society. Other, however, feel it is nothing more than leisure activity. Discuss both views and give opinion.

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The world is grooming with extracurricular
activities
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especially
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 in
sports
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 and country strength
calculated
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 based on
sports
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acheivement
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achievement
but
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apply
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some
people
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 think
its
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it is
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 a leisure activity but part of them
celebrated
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sports
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activities
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.In
this
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essay
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i
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 will discuss how
sports
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 interrelate with our life and
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people
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people's
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opinion
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opinions
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.
Firstly
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sports
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plays
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play
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crucial
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 role in our life and it is mixed with our daily
activities
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 because it helps to free our stress and strengthen our mental ability .
The
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 past two decades
sports
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activities
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blooming
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 everywhere and educational institutes
also
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giving
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 more importance
and
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appreciate
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to students
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students
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students'
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 performance.Recently the world chess champion Guhesh gave
interview
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 about how the government and his school helped to achieve his dream.At the same time a lot of
people
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 getting obesity and
stress related
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dieseas
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disease
diseases
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advised
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to
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that
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 all
sports
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very
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 important for our good health.
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Secondly
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 few
people
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argued
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sports
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 waste of time and we need to focus
our
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 education and work .Especially
sports
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 like cricket and WWE
people
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 said
its
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it's
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 all preplanned
game
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games
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.
Younger
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The younger
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 generation
spend
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 a lot of time
in
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on
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 their games so they
didnt
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didn't
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their
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on their
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 studies so they
didnt
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didn't
 get
bright
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a bright
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 future.
To
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 my opinion
sports
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crucial
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 for
the
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apply
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society because it will help to improve our
mind
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minds
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 physically and mentally .

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coherence and cohesion
Improve the clarity and structure of the essay by ensuring each paragraph has a clear main idea with supporting details.
task achievement
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language use
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task achievement
The essay addresses both views on the importance of sports in society, which shows an understanding of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction signals the content of the essay well, indicating that both sides will be discussed.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Chronic diseases
  • Teamwork
  • Cultural divides
  • Revenue generator
  • Infrastructure
  • Patriotism
  • Role models
  • Commercialization
  • Recreation
  • Stress-relief
  • Elite sports
  • Injury risks
  • Doping scandals
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