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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You use public trasnport and have been facing issues. Write a letter to the public transport autoroties. In your letter include: why public transport is important to you what problem you face suggest what can be done to improve public transport

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am a resident of
the
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Hill Street and I am writing
this
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 letter to draw your attention to the
difficeulties
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difficulties
 that we are facing with the public transport in
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 area. I work as a nurse in the Medicana Hospital and I have long shifts that often finish after midnight
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the main means of commuting to work for me is using buses. Unfortunately, the bus that passes my neighbourhood works from 8 to 23.
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, I have to take a taxi to
reach
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 home at night, which costs a lot. In consequence, it would be great if you could change the timetable of
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 route in order to ease transportation for the local people. Thank you for your cooperation in advance and I look forward to
heraing
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hearing
 good news in the near future. Yours faithfully John Vels

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task achievement
Try to include more specific details about how the changes in the timetable could benefit others in the community, not just yourself. This would enhance the task response further.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread your letter for small spelling errors (e.g., 'difficulties' instead of 'difficeulties', 'hearing' instead of 'heraing'). This can help improve your overall coherence and polish your writing.
task achievement
The letter maintains a polite and formal tone throughout, which is suitable for addressing public transport authorities.
coherence and cohesion
The structure is clear, with a logical progression of ideas which helps the reader follow your concerns effectively.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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