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Band 4.5

Some people are happy to spend their whole life living in the same place or area. However, others prefer to live in many different areas over their lifetime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some individuals prefer to live in their hometown
while
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 others believe living in various Places will offer them better
opportnities
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opportunities
 to progress in both their
peesonal
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personal
 and work
life
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. In my
opininoin
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opinion
, globalization can help us to improve the quality of our
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life
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lives
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 without the necessity
if
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of
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 immigrating
in
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to
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 different
period
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periods
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if
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of
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 our lives. The
protents
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protests
portents
 of
this
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 belief hold
this
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 view that migrating to new areas will
instill
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an
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extra spiritual and mental pressure
to
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 the person and his family.
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, most of the time, those who migrate to other arenas need to start their
life
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 from zero level; they need to
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look
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 for a new job,
a
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and a
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new home, even
it
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if it
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 is
nessary
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necessary
 to strive to achieve very simple things like achieving a new driving license.
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, It gets more complicated when you come to understand a majority of jobs require either an education degree or a job experience from the destination country. Considering all these details,
these
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 group of society having a stable and constant
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life style
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lifestyle
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 has the biggest priority.
On the other hand
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, the opponents of
this
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 idea believe important successes will be achieved through challenges. If people have
tendency
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a tendency
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 to make a difference in their lives they should have enough courage to accept challenges. A decision to migrate to another city or country can be the beginning of a big end. In
this
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 way, we get familiar with different cultures,
to
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find a job we increase our
endeavor
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, and of
course
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course,
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 these hard struggles will offer a great feat to us. In conclusion,
although
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 I accept that having a stable
life
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 in the same place
whole
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the whole
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 of our
live
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 has
its
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certain advantages including a peaceful
life
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 full of serenity.
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, I am a big fan of taking big risks in my personal
life
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. To be honest, I do not to change my residency situation every other year but once in a
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life
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 can be a good idea.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to provide more clear topic sentences and supporting details for each paragraph to enhance the logical flow of your ideas.
task achievement
Ensure that your thesis statement is precisely stated in your introduction and clearly reflects your viewpoint, as well as the discussion of both sides.
general
Be mindful of spelling and grammatical errors, as they can detract from the clarity of your ideas and overall quality of writing.
task achievement
You have a clear understanding of the topic and present both sides of the argument, which is a crucial aspect of the task.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your viewpoint and reflects on the topic discussed, which is important for a strong finish.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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