People eat more processed food than they did in the past . Why is this ? What are the effects of this ?

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Nowadays ,

people

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eat more fast

food

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as compared to the past .

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is because of their hectic

life-style

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lifestyle

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and it badly

effects

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their

health

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. The hectic

life -style

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lifestyle

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of today's youth

force

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forces

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them to eat more junk

food

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. As almost every

people

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spend more hours

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apply

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working ,most of the

time

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they don't

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time

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have time

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to cook at home .

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, they buy

juck

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junk

food

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from outside and

saves

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save

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their

times

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time

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, research shows that both Tim Hortons and McDonald's sales increased drastically as compared

last

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few years .

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everybody knows it's unhealthy for

health

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it's saves

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a lot of

time

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for

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every single working

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people

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person

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. Eating more fast

food

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cause

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causes

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health

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problems in all generations .

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people

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eat processed

food

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on a daily basis and they

didn't

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do any exercise or yoga ,

people

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gain more fat which

cause

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causes

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obesity .

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study

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shows that 40

percent

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per cent

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generation

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the generation

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have

obesity

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obese

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because of their eating habits . In conclusion,

today

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today's

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youth prefer

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fast

food

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, it

caused

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causes

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obesity which is

very

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common

health

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issues

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issue

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prsent

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present

time

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Writing

Make sure to proofread for spelling mistakes such as 'juck' instead of 'junk' and 'prsent' instead of 'present'. Such errors can distract the reader.

Task Response

The essay addresses the prompt by discussing reasons for increased fast food consumption and the health effects related.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

192 words

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People eat more processed food than they did in the past . Why is this ? What are the effects of this ?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some believes that professional, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

The internet has changed the way we communicate. Much communication today happens through social media. Some people support this and think it is a positive development. Others believe that social media have negative effects. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some schools have restricted the use of mobile phones. Is this a positive development or a negative one? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples fromyour own knowledge or experience.

Some think that the Olympic games help bring people from different nations together. Others, however, think that hosting the Olympics wastes money which could be used for important issues. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.