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Writing Samples
Band 2

the graph of wheat export from three diffrent contris

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The line graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the production of wheat
over
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in
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 three
country
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countries
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 which are Australia,
Canda
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Canada
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,
European
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 community.
Overall
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, At the beginning of the
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period
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period,
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European
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 and Canada started at
higher
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a higher
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point
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 than
other
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 and they fluctuated until the end of the
period
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European
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 exports
higher
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were higher
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that
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than
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 Canada.
In contrast
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, Australia started at
lower
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a lower
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point
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 than
other
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others
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, and it continued to gradually decline until it hit a low
point
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at the end
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 of the
period
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. In 1995, it is clear from the graph that
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European
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Europe
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 started below 20
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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tonnes
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 and continued to decline in 1986.
However
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,
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European
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Europe
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 experienced a gradual increase to a peak
point
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nearly
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of nearly
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 25
millions
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million
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tonnes
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then
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 it fell
at
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in
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 1989 and finished at 19 million
tonnes
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.Canada
in
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on
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 the other side, started above 15 and decreased to a low
point
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 below 15 million
tonnes
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 in 1986.
it
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It
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 continued to
levelled
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 off until 1988
after
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and after
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 that, it experienced an increase until 1990. Australia began at 15
then
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 it dropped the whole
period
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 until hit
a
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the
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 lowest
point
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 near 10
millions
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million
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tonnes
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 in 1990.

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Task Achievement
Try to improve the clarity of your key features in the overview. For example, rather than stating Australia's decline more generally, you might specify the amount of decline clearly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use linking phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs. This will enhance the reader's understanding of the comparisons you're making.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure accurate spelling and grammar. For example, 'diffrent' should be 'different', and 'millions tonnes' should be 'million tonnes'.
Task Achievement
You provided a clear overview of trends in wheat production for the three countries, which is a significant part of the task.
Task Achievement
The essay presents information about the trends for each country, which shows you have understood the data presented in the graph.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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