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the graph of wheat exports in three diffrent countries

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The line graph illustrates the production of wheat in three countries which are Australia,
Canda
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Canada
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, European community.
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, At the beginning of the
period
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,
European
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Europe
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 and Canada started at a higher
point
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 than others and they fluctuated until the end of the
period
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 European exports were higher
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 Canada.
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, Australia started at a lower
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 than others, and it continued to decline gradually until it hit a low
point
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at the end
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 of the
period
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. In 1995, it is clear from the graph that Europe started below 20
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of
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tonnes
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 and continued to decline in 1986.
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, Europe experienced a gradual increase to a peak
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 of nearly 25
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tonnes
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then
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 it fell in 1989 and finished at 19
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tonnes
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. Canada on the other side, started above 15 and decreased to a low
point
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 below 15
million
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tonnes
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 in 1986. It continued to level off until 1988 and after that, it experienced an increase until 1990. Australia began at 15
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 it dropped the whole
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 until it hit the lowest
point
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 near 10
million
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tonnes
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 in 1990.

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task achievement
Ensure to use precise vocabulary to describe the trends more clearly. For example, specify the years when discussing changes in data more accurately.
coherence and cohesion
Work on including a concluding statement that summarizes the key trends observed in the graph. This reinforces the overall analysis.
coherence and cohesion
Use more varied linking words to enhance the flow between sentences and ideas, which will improve the logical structure of your essay.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear comparison between the three countries regarding wheat production and highlights the trends over time.
task achievement
The attempt to summarize different countries' data trends collectively shows an understanding of a comparative analysis, which is a strong skill.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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