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The plans below show a student accommodation building 2010 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps compare the layout of an apartment building for
students
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 in 2010 and its current one after undergoing significant improvements. In 2010,
students
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 entered the building from the main entrance, and
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 after passing through the hallway, they found a
student
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bedroom
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 located just in front of them. Walking along the hallway, there was a bathroom and a
student
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bedroom
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 on the left and a kitchen on the right.
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, when
students
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 kept going straight and turned left in the corner, they found the third
student
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bedroom
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 and a living room lying there.
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, three gardens were suited to the north and south sides of
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 apartment building, offering many green spaces for
students
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. At present, a new en-suite room has been added to the
student
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bedroom
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 that faces the main entrance. The kitchen has
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 improved with the addition of a social area. The living room and the garden originally located on the northwest side of the building are replaced by two new
student
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 bedrooms,
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 garden located on the south side is transformed into a car parking area.
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, the
student
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 accommodation building has improved significantly with the increasing number of
student
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 bedrooms and the addition of a social area and a car park.

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coherence and cohesion
Improve the introduction to clearly state the overall changes and make it more engaging. You might want to summarize the key differences before diving into details.
task achievement
Provide more detailed comparisons between the two periods, particularly focusing on the specific changes and their implications.
coherence and cohesion
Try to enhance the conclusion by briefly summarizing the most significant changes and their impact on students living in the accommodation.
positive
The essay is well-structured, with clear paragraphs that make it easy to follow the changes in the accommodation over time.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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