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Band 4

The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Many people believe that the growth of fuel
cost
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 is the best solution for the world’s environmental problems. To a certain
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 I agree with that strategy, but I
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 think that there are
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 more noticeable methods of environmental protection. On the one hand, I agree that increasing the cost of fuel is one of the best solutions to protect the environment. Because it could raise people’s awareness
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 the frequency and length of their travels so that they cut down on unnecessary trips.
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, more sustainable mobility choices witness a surge in demand.
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, in America, hybrid vehicles and smaller transport have had a growing market since 2010.
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, I believe that car emissions are not the sole cause because emissions from livestock farming and other industries are
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 significant contributors to pollution. In fact, livestock farming accounts for 64
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 of total methane emissions.
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, providing individuals and businesses with an incentive to protect the environment would be more effective.
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, applying the lower tax on companies which leave less impact on their surroundings. In conclusion, despite increasing the cost of fuel is a good way, I believe that both pros and cons play equally important roles in that view.

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task achievement
Strengthen your introduction by clearly stating your position and outlining the key points you will discuss in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use linking words and phrases to enhance the logical flow between your ideas and paragraphs.
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Provide more specific examples or data to support your claims, such as statistics or studies related to the effects of higher fuel costs on environmental issues.
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You have presented a balanced argument by acknowledging both sides of the issue, which is a commendable approach.
coherence and cohesion
Your paragraphs are mostly focused on single ideas and you show awareness of the counterargument, which is good for coherence and cohesion.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disproportionately affect
  • renewable sources
  • solar energy
  • equity in environmental policies
  • exacerbating social inequalities
  • incentivizing
  • subsidies
  • strict regulations
  • industrial emissions
  • sustainable local production
  • carbon footprints
  • punitive measures
  • sustainability efforts
  • robust and lasting changes
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