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A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called 'The book that influenced me most'. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter •describe what this book was about •explain how this book influenced you •say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

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Dear Editor, I am writing to you to include
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 book Seagull" by Jonathan Livingston in the article, The book that influenced me most" The main hero is a bird which cannot find its place in the flock and for
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 its life seems to be monotonous and meaningless.
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 of acquiring food the brave bird begins to hone its flight skills and technique. Over time, it was excluded from society. as a wrong member and banished to live on distant diffs The author was able to show a strong character. From my point of view,
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 book is able to inspire the reader, to make him change his monotonous life into breathtaking
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, it is stated to forget about principles, to break the system.
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, it talks about living your own life, doing what you like and not what you are loved to do, but in any
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, there are own, pitfalls"
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 masterpiece inspires me to push forward never give up and I believe that it influences other people same way if they can
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similar. circumstances character. as the main Best regards, Mila

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task response
Consider adding more specific details about the book's themes and how they resonated with you personally.
coherence
Try to ensure a clearer structure in your letter by separating ideas into distinct paragraphs, leading to improved coherence.
task achievement
The personal impact of the book on your life is effectively conveyed, and your enthusiasm is evident.
coherence
The concept of not conforming to societal norms is a strong theme in your response, showing critical thinking.
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