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Band 4

Some people believe that you can never become fluent in a language unless you have spent time living or working in a country. To what extent do you agree?

Become fluent in a
language
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 unless you have spent time living or working in a
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country
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country,
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 I think
could
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it could
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 be possible. I agree with that statement and will show you my proofs
but
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, but
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as well
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apply
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there will
be
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also be
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 some disadvantages that I can say as well.
To begin
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 with, there are a lot of people working
on
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in
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 different roles and positions that require different
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language
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 even in our
country
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. We would need to understand what
doest
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apply
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it
mean
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means
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 "fluent".
On
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In
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 my
opinion
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opinion,
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 if you can cooperate with your
collegues
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colleagues
 and do your job well, understand
a
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your
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 customers or clients
and
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, and
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 you feel that it's
enough
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enough,
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 it means that you are fluent in that
language
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. You should be able to speak on
a
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apply
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various themes like weather, holidays, spare time
etc
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, etc
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. So my main idea here
that
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is that
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 you understand and speak with no doubts with the others. But
on the other
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hand
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hand,
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 it's really hard to feel the atmosphere and that
language
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 barrier
enough
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, enough
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 or not, if you are not in the community. There could be different thoughts on it, but for
sure
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sure,
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 if you are in a
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country
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country,
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 you will see and feel
that
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whether
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 you are fluent or not.Communicating with other people, friends and
collegues
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colleagues
, with
neighbors
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neighbours
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etc
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, etc
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. Because,
on
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in
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 my opinion, you can be
real
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really
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 fluent only in real
day to day
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day-to-day
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 life. As a conclusion, I can
asure
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assure
 you that if you are in a
country
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 or community living and speaking on a daily
basis
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basis,
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 that
language
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 you are fluent
.
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in.
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 So try to be more
open minded
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open-minded
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 and speak a lot
and
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, and
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 it will really
helps
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help
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 you to become
billingual
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bilingual
.

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content
Make a clear plan before you write. Start with a short view, then give two or three main ideas, and end with a short conclusion.
language
Use simple, correct grammar. Check word form and spelling.
structure
Group your ideas into paragraphs. Put one idea in each paragraph.
content
Give an example from daily work or life to show fluency.
content
You show the topic and you say you agree.
cohesion
There are links that connect parts of the text.
structure
There is a start and end idea in the piece.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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