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Some people believe that you can never become fluent in a language unless you have spent time living or working in a country. To what extent do you agree?

It is common
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that
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 some people tend to
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 that you can never become fluent in a language unless you have been living or working in the particular place.
This
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discuss
this
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Firstly
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 and most likely, I feel that I am
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into
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 the position of when
persons
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 can achieve the highest degree in learning
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the
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 foreign
lanuage
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language
 without leaving their own country. I am convinced that it
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really depends on the level of their motivation and
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many
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were
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 applied.
Secondly
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, I would say that the true
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 is the most significant factor here. There is nothing
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impossible in the world.
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, the other point of view cannot be easily rejected. So, it cannot be denied that the impact of being a long-term resident of another country can rapidly and widely
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influence
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the study
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 its longevity. From my
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, it is
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considered
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 much easier and quicker way to start speaking even on a basic level when you travel a lot, visit various countries, meet different cultures and native
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speakers
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To sum up
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, I would like to say that these two statements can be true at some points, because each of us can have the personal though on that, but I am the personal believer that any induviduals can learn foreign lanuages if it is the real desire and the goal has been set with the high level of passion to make it truth.

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structure
Plan your essay first. Write a short intro that says your view. Then have two or three body parts with one main idea in each. End with a clear conclusion.
coherence
Start each body with a clear topic sentence. Use simple link words to move from one idea to the next.
content
Give a real idea or example to back each point. This helps the reader and shows you can argue well.
content
The essay shows you can talk about both sides of the idea.
coherence
You use some linking words to show order and connect ideas.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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