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Band 2

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It may be a good idea for the future, but I do not agree with that statement because many people prefer to read the printed version. Even Though
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 printed newspapers or books need a lot of paper,
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I think it has many advantages.
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if we read from the printed version, it will be more
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 than
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. Because of the light from
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, many people get bored when they read from their phone or laptop. Occasionally they might have
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problem
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 if they
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to
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 much time on the screen.
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, people who read from
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 or books more focus to do
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reading activities, because there
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 no
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of
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 notifications compare with the other one.
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, the satisfied feeling comes if we read from the printed version. Because it gives us
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 sensation. The important thing is reading from physical books or newspapers increases our mental health. Imagine that if we read online, we will get much pressure if our device
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 a prob/em
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 reading. Other than that, reading online for free is cheating. Because we didn’t respect the Author that struggling to make a book.

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Ensure your introduction clearly states your position regarding the statement. Be explicit in whether you agree, disagree, or partially agree.
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Use linking words and phrases to improve the flow of your ideas. This will help connect your thoughts more logically and help the reader follow your argument.
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Provide specific examples or evidence to support your main points. This will enhance the credibility of your arguments and help you achieve a higher score in task achievement.
coherence and cohesion
In your conclusion, summarize your main points again to reinforce your position. This will make your conclusion stronger and clearer.
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You have presented a clear personal view on the topic, which is important in such essay types.
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Your arguments regarding the negative effects of screens on reading are relevant and thoughtful, demonstrating engagement with the topic.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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