A friend who lives in another country has invited you to come and stay with him/her on your next holiday. You are too busy to accept the invitation. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, Thank him/her for the invitation Explain why you cannot come Ask him/her about other times to visit You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear......

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Dear sandy, I hope you are doing well. Since my
childhood
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I always wanted to visit
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the U.S.A
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U.S.A
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U.S.A.
and explore all those adventurous activities. I am really
greatfull
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grateful
for your invitation.
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, I would like to spend my summer holidays with you enjoying visiting tourist attractions.
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,
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some unavoidable circumstances, I couldn't come on holiday. After finishing my graduation, I applied for several jobs in
bangalore
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Bangalore
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and got selected
in
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for
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one of those jobs.
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, they are insisting
me
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to
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attend 2 months internship for job confirmation. Even though I am very much interested in
visting
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visiting
U.S
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U.S.
and
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quality time with you, I couldn't miss
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opportunity.
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,
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job is really important at
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time since we are facing financial problems. I hope you understand the situation and
i
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surely visit
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apply
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next summer. After job confirmation taking a leave is not difficult. Thank you for understanding me Regards, Santhoshkumar

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coherence and cohesion
Try to separate your ideas more clearly into distinct paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea. This will enhance the structure of your letter.
task achievement
Your letter is friendly and shows gratitude, but adding a bit more detail in your explanation of why you can't visit could further enhance the suitability of your writing tone.
task achievement
Your letter has a warm tone and expresses gratitude, which is great for building rapport with your friend.
coherence and cohesion
The overall message of your letter is clear, and your reasons for not being able to visit are understandable.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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