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The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

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The table provides the figure for the
amount
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 of
electricity
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 manufactured by renewable resources - Geothermal, Wind, Solar, Hydraulic, and Bio-mass - from 2009 to 2012 measured by trillion watt hours (
TWh
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).
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, it is apparent from the
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information
 supplied that the quantity of
electricity
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producing
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 by all regenerative resources experienced an upward trend over
four-year
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 period.
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, hydraulic produced the largest
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 of
electricity
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 over 4 years
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 solar was the least one. In detail, the total
electricity
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 output by hydraulic started at 3329
TWh
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 in 2009, it
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 rapidly increased to 3514,3
TWh
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 in the next year. Before peaking at 3662,4
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 in 2012, it moderately rose by 15TWh in 2011.
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, there was a gradual increase in the
amount
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 of
electricity
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 generated by wind,
begining
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beginning
 at 276,4
TWh
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 in 2009, rising to 351,2
TWh
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 in 2010 and to 451,5
TWh
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 in 2011 and finishing at 534
TWh
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 in 2012.
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, the quantity of
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production
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 by geothermal remained relatively between 67 and 70
TWh
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 from 2009 to 2012. Regarding the remaining resources, before increasing nearly five times to 104,5
TWh
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 after 4 years, the
amount
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 of
electricity
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 generation by solar climbed nearly by 10
TWh
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 to 33,5 TWk in 2010 and by 20
TWh
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 to 53,1
TWh
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 in 2011.
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, bio-mass energy produced 246,8
TWh
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electricity
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 in 2009, its figures
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 rose gradually to 288,9
TWh
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 in 2010
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and
 307,6
TWh
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 in 2010 and finished at 326,2
TWh
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 in 2012.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, electricity, twh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Renewable sources
  • Electricity production
  • Significant growth/decline
  • Yearly basis
  • Specific figures
  • Stagnated
  • Regional differences
  • Anomalies
  • Unexpected trends
  • Implications
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