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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013 .

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013 .
The bar graph compares the proportion of
people
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 who eat in junk
food
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restaurants
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 repeatedly during three
years
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 ( 2003 , 2006 , and 2013 ) in the USA at several different times in
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.
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 , It can seen that
people
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preferred
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 to eat in fast
food
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restaurants
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in
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once a week or a month.
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 , the
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 of
people
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 who went to eat unhealthy
food
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 every day or never was very little.
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 with , the highest
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 for
people
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 who eat
the
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fast
food
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 once a week or a month was just over, 35 % in both
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 2005 and 2013 . And
then
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, it follows 2003 with around 30 % . The second highest rank percentage who eat from
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several times a week was in 2006 , with 20 % , and in 2003 and 2013 , with just above 15 % . Meanwhile , the
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 witnessed Similar in both three
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 at around 15 % for those who eat a few times a year. Regarding the smallest
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 for both those who never go to eat at
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 and
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 those who don't go to eat every day , with just under 5 % during the period between 2003 and 2013
moreover
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 ,
people
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 should take care of their health , especially in the type of
food
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 they eat .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food, restaurants, years, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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