The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
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The bar graph indicates the proportion of Australian citizens in
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and gender groups who did sports as a hobby in 2010. The most remarkable record in the dataset is that at least 39% of Australians did physical activity regardless of gender and
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, approximately 53% of elder Australian females who were
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35 to 64 did regular sportive activities. The peak point
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between 15 and 24
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52.8%. After the 24th birthday, the percentage of males' sports
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gradually plummeted to 39.5% until
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45.
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, they achieved an upward trend,
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, in the
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group of 65 and over 46.7% of men did briefed that they did regular physical activity. 47.7% of the youngest group of females in Australia did sports,
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, the rate plateaued around 53% between ages 35 and 64, but it surpassed the rate of males for that
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group. The rate of oldest females almost matched with the percentage of oldest men by 47.1%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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