The rise of the convienence foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle.What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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convienence
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convenience
fods
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foods
has raised an
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awareness
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about
the
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disadvantages
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trend. The
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convience
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convenience
food
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are it
halped
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helps
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working parents
to
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limit
thier
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their
time for coking and
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of cooking they just buy from the
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convience
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convenience
store.As majority of the parents
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work
full time
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jobs, which limits them from cooking a healthy meal for
themslevs
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themselves
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thier
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their
children,so f the
conivence
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convenience
store
is selling
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healthy foods the parents would not
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hesitate
and buy for
thier childremn
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their children
.
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convience
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convenience
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food
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also
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advantages
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modern lifestyles
by providing more
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options
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insted
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instead
of
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eating
eatin'
only one
everyday
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.
This
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hleps
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helps
them to eat
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what
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convience
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convenience
food
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has
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affected
modernd
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modern
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lifestyles
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.
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lead
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to obesity,as
convinvce
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convince
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food
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are
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mainly
process
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food
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which
cintains
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contains
a lot of fat
in
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and it affects
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our
your
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convience
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convenience
food
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arent
healty
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healthy
if we consume them everday ,it may
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our health in
diifernts
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different
ways .By looking at the poplaurtuty people are
consumung
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consuming
as its
doesnt
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doesn't
requried
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required
require
them to cook but they are neglecting the disadvantages of
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the
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convience
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convenience
food
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.
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why many people are more keen
about
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the
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and neglect
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the
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disadvantages
as the convince
food
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are
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not
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always fresh and each time we
purchses
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purchase
it we
dont
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don't
even look at the ingredients in it .
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think people
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by the
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convienece
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convenience
food
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,as
its
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it is
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rewady
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easy
to eat ,which most
of
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the
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apply
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working
paretns
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parents
would buy
it
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.

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Language
Make sure to proofread your essay for spelling and grammar mistakes. For instance, 'convienence' should be spelled 'convenience' and 'thier' should be 'their'.
Structure
Try to structure your essay more clearly by having distinct introduction, body, and conclusion paragraphs.
Content
Provide more specific examples to support your points, such as mentioning specific types of convenience foods or statistics about their consumption.
Content
You have identified both advantages and disadvantages, which is important for addressing the prompt effectively.
Content
Your points about working parents and modern lifestyle are relevant and resonate with current societal issues.

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